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Why can't you see
Or do you choose to ignore it
Stop trying to save me
From the dark abyss

I prefer this
This silent world
I have built
For myself

So please I beg
Of you to
Stop trying to
Save me or else
You will be stuck
Here too

You are not going
To get very far
With the words
You say for
They hit the walls
I have built
That no one can
Ever break in this
Reality I prefer to stay

Please do not
Try to shatter what
Have I have for
I am too far
Gone too reach already

Goodbye to the friend
I call have called
The real world
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DGVeil Featured By Owner Jan 9, 2014  Hobbyist
I love this. Beautiful.

Not everyone will be trapped. Maybe it is you who will be. Trapped by one willing to help and pull you out of it. It's amazing what a choice few will do for you.
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stara1235 Featured By Owner Jan 4, 2014  Professional Writer
Thanks guys for the feedback! Any ideas for my next short story or poem? Message me and I will feature it in my next writing!
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TheKatWhoGotJinxxed Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist General Artist
This is amazing. Beautiful language, and full of feeling. I love it :-)
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Niathefreak Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014
Wonderful:)
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nontenzu2000 Featured By Owner Jan 2, 2014  Hobbyist Traditional Artist
That's pretty good :) sounds like m sometimes when I just want to be alone
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